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This poem by Robert Hass is interesting. The argument he is trying to make is that poetry is taking normal actions and trying to say what is going on in a new way. His example is the difference between a leaf fluttering and the motion of the heat of august protecting cells from drying out. Essentially these are saying the same thing but the poetic one sounds nicer. As Hass says it "disenchant"s us.

"Dance with me, dancer. Oh, I will." I think Hass is very confused. Now that I read this again and have heard the   discussion I know he is trying to say that words just can't do it. This really doesn't resonate with me though because I feel like the rest of his poem is doing it. The aspen glittering in the wind is very enchanting. It takes our mind to another place. I feel like the italics section is him trying to give an example to the reader of what his point is. I don't feel like this is effective though. I feel like the italics section is very enchanting and takes the mind to another place through this interesting use of language. 

Four Letter Word Project

Baby with an Ipad

This video is very striking. It shows the difference between what we are used to using as a public and what the future will be used to. This is the perfect example of remediation. The old way of using magazines is changing into the ipad. It provides the new generation with the simplicity of using ones hands to scroll across screens.

My Audience

The Precipice of a mountain looms over head. This behemoth expectation that I try to conquer. The boulders and pitfalls of grammar and style. The handholds that form in the rock through my developing structure. The arduous climb of writing sentence by sentence. I reach a plateau and think I am finished. Then my attention is brought to the next cliff not seen before. I try and revise my path around this seemingly impossible rabbit trail. Again the trial continues but I am reminded that the peak is not so far away. As I reach the pinnacle quality of this paper my mind is exhausted. Looking back on the trail I have blazed a though occurs to me. Someone else reading the words along this path will traverse what I have constructed. At the same view I am looking from a different idea is seen through their eyes. A mountain range of possibilities is brought to their eyes. The effects of my written though stimulates their feet itching to put on their own hiking boots and explore their own intellectual heights.

First Thoughts

This paper was a little bit of stress for me. This is because it was a little bit of a surprise on Friday when you told us a paper was due three days from then on Monday. To add on top of this friday night I was sitting down and I dropped my laptop. The screen broke. So I was in a situation where I had to find a computer to type on. Also I really wasn't confident in understanding what the actual assignment was. In the end though I believe I did an ok job. Nothing Fantastic, but I got the work done.

With just reading the first paragraph I feel like this draft is terrible. The Paper is not formatted correctly containing no heading or even a page number. The first paragraph is all of barely more then a line of the page. This line is just a piece of circular logic that I can not see heading anywhere. This is not an introduction to anything. This should be expanded.

My next rhetorical move will be to try and include more metaphors in my writing. At the moment I feel like it is just a lot of questioning and facts. If I include more metaphors it might be easier to understand what I am trying to get across. I also might bring the idea in my introductory paragraph full circle into the end of my essay.

Coney Island Of The Mind

Coney Island of the Mind was a video about one man reminiscing about Coney Island. He was looking back a the great times of the past. These memories were juxtaposed against the reality of how Coney Island has faded over time. The cinematography and choice of videos that were used truly fit what the video was trying to say. The speaker obviously cared about coney island a lot. To be honest it seemed to be a little over dramatized but it got across the point that the author thought about the place in two ways.